I would love to read some constructive criticism on my rough draft of my reconsideration letter. Be honest, I have thick skin. Thank you in advance.
I am respectfully requesting reconsideration for the Baccalaureate Degree Completion Program by the Intelligence Specialist officer board community. Since my previous application, I have demonstrated significant self-improvement. I have improved my ASTB score and have completed fourteen additional credit hours towards my degree. I have been inducted into the Golden Key International Honour Society as a result of my outstanding GPA. I have earned a place on the Dean’s List of Honor Students at Humphreys College. I have also become an officer of the San Joaquin Superior Court as a volunteer Court Appointed Special Advocate for children who are dependents of the state. My improvements within the last few months are clear and evident demonstrations of my potential as a Naval Officer. As an officer, the Navy can count on my continuous and unyielding effort to be better than I was the day before. Commitment and persistence shall never cease. That is my promise to the United States Navy.
I am respectfully requesting reconsideration for the Baccalaureate Degree Completion Program by the Intelligence Specialist officer board community. Since my previous application, I have demonstrated significant self-improvement. I have improved my ASTB score and have completed fourteen additional credit hours towards my degree. I have been inducted into the Golden Key International Honour Society as a result of my outstanding GPA. I have earned a place on the Dean’s List of Honor Students at Humphreys College. I have also become an officer of the San Joaquin Superior Court as a volunteer Court Appointed Special Advocate for children who are dependents of the state. My improvements within the last few months are clear and evident demonstrations of my potential as a Naval Officer. As an officer, the Navy can count on my continuous and unyielding effort to be better than I was the day before. Commitment and persistence shall never cease. That is my promise to the United States Navy.