A4sforever, my mistake for offending you.
No apolgies required - you gotta remember that A4's is a just a crotchity old man who has been "stunned" one too many times.
A4sforever, my mistake for offending you.
Skool daze ... ??? Never. Not even once.
Military ...??? Never. Not even once.
What some folks are trying to say (IMO) is: the "personal statement" is a reflection of your professional attitude, confidence and just plain "how hungry" you are. I have sat on many boards to recommend enlisted folks for OCS, STA-21, LDO/CWO, etc and I can tell you that their personal statement tells me a lot about who and what they are. Often, I think to myself, that a statement I'm reading is not the way I would have expressed the same sentiment, but it's powerful, genuine and "personal." When I read your personal statement, I want it to match the "look in your eye" and the "fire in your belly." Make sense ???
We're just asking for some advice as to how to make it stand out, based on what the Board is looking for.Maybe I'm crazy.
AND amazed, too .... you forgot that part ....No apolgies required - you gotta remember that A4's is a just a crotchity old man who has been "stunned" one too many times.
Relax everyone... poster never asked anyone to WRITE his statement, he just said he wanted feedback. Can anyone here tell me they never asked a friend to lend a more objective set of eyes on a paper they'd written?
No mistake made, no apology required nor desired .... you didn't "offend" me. Trust me; I've been "offended" by experts, and this wasn't "one of those" times .....A4sforever (and others), my mistake for offending you. I didn't realize I started this thread to flame people, thanks for the good luck wishes. I am sure I'll need it......
As long as people don't give him stuff like "say that you have XYZ traits because the board likes people who say that," I don't see a problem. Most people are looking to have their personal statements edited for grammar and clarity. It's a very smart thing, too, because 75% of people coming out of college can't write worth a shit.
Not a criticism, just an observation......75% of people coming out of college can't write worth a shit.
Injineers dount neid to have grammar or spellink pat doewn.
You'd be surprised how many junior and senior year students I encounter who don't even know all the parts of speech, let alone how to correctly write parallel structure and keep essays in the active voice.