Joeski
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Evening Gents!
This is my first shot at a moto statement. I'm trying to take a slightly different approach than what I've seen. FYI: I know what you'll think after reading the first sentence... It's not what you think, and I realize its a bit longer than 400 words. How strict is the length limit? Any feedback would be appreciated, please let me know if my different approach is a good for differentiating myself or if I'm barking up the wrong tree. I appreciate everyone's help, all of you are an excellent resource for OCS hopefulls like myself, thanks and keep it up!
In an industry where the recent economic downturn has devastated the potential for career opportunities, I managed to find an excellent career opportunity. As a recent college graduate, I wasn?t going to let my lack of experience hold me back, my determination and motivation are what led me to my current position. By finding a well paying job with excellent advancement opportunities I am labeled as successful by my peers. This speaks to how success is measured in modern American society: one?s ability to generate income and the size of that income. I?ll agree that I succeeded in finding an opportunity in a market where many cannot but my definition of success is far different from the aforementioned definition. My definition of success is overcoming challenges few have the motivation to overcome, leading by example while helping others realize their potential and succeeding in a career field where success is not measured by the size of one?s bank account. My life goal is to succeed as a United States Naval Officer, where success is measured by occupational ability, motivation, mental ability, determination, physical ability, excellent leadership and a genuine commitment to defending the freedom and liberty of the USA.
The ability to gain the respect of my peers and lead them to their own success, my own ability to rise to the challenge and perform beyond expectations and physical capability: these are three reasons why I believe I will excel as a Naval Officer. In my current profession the interns look up to me as a leader because I set the bar for performance and I?m always willing to help them reach their potential. I earned the highest score on my Series 6 exam and I know how to complete every project correctly, quickly and efficiently. Since I have been there, every intern has passed the Series 6 and we have had kudos, not complaints on our completed projects. During my first internship, we were challenged with production goals to earn a trip to Milwaukee for the company annual meeting. I surpassed that production goal and ranked among the top 10% of interns nationally. Before my senior year of high school, I never played football competitively. I began training with the team in January and went to tryouts in July with high hopes. I made the Varsity team. In a short period of time I was able to build enough strength and show the team I was capable to make plays on Thursday nights.
As a Naval Officer, I will be able to become part of something much larger than myself. I have accomplished much at a young age but I strive to earn the ultimate accomplishment: The responsibility of a United States Naval Officer. The Navy can and should expect a lot from me. The skills I will learn as a Naval Officer will mold me into an excellent leader and I genuinely believe I can become an asset to the fleet.
This is my first shot at a moto statement. I'm trying to take a slightly different approach than what I've seen. FYI: I know what you'll think after reading the first sentence... It's not what you think, and I realize its a bit longer than 400 words. How strict is the length limit? Any feedback would be appreciated, please let me know if my different approach is a good for differentiating myself or if I'm barking up the wrong tree. I appreciate everyone's help, all of you are an excellent resource for OCS hopefulls like myself, thanks and keep it up!
In an industry where the recent economic downturn has devastated the potential for career opportunities, I managed to find an excellent career opportunity. As a recent college graduate, I wasn?t going to let my lack of experience hold me back, my determination and motivation are what led me to my current position. By finding a well paying job with excellent advancement opportunities I am labeled as successful by my peers. This speaks to how success is measured in modern American society: one?s ability to generate income and the size of that income. I?ll agree that I succeeded in finding an opportunity in a market where many cannot but my definition of success is far different from the aforementioned definition. My definition of success is overcoming challenges few have the motivation to overcome, leading by example while helping others realize their potential and succeeding in a career field where success is not measured by the size of one?s bank account. My life goal is to succeed as a United States Naval Officer, where success is measured by occupational ability, motivation, mental ability, determination, physical ability, excellent leadership and a genuine commitment to defending the freedom and liberty of the USA.
The ability to gain the respect of my peers and lead them to their own success, my own ability to rise to the challenge and perform beyond expectations and physical capability: these are three reasons why I believe I will excel as a Naval Officer. In my current profession the interns look up to me as a leader because I set the bar for performance and I?m always willing to help them reach their potential. I earned the highest score on my Series 6 exam and I know how to complete every project correctly, quickly and efficiently. Since I have been there, every intern has passed the Series 6 and we have had kudos, not complaints on our completed projects. During my first internship, we were challenged with production goals to earn a trip to Milwaukee for the company annual meeting. I surpassed that production goal and ranked among the top 10% of interns nationally. Before my senior year of high school, I never played football competitively. I began training with the team in January and went to tryouts in July with high hopes. I made the Varsity team. In a short period of time I was able to build enough strength and show the team I was capable to make plays on Thursday nights.
As a Naval Officer, I will be able to become part of something much larger than myself. I have accomplished much at a young age but I strive to earn the ultimate accomplishment: The responsibility of a United States Naval Officer. The Navy can and should expect a lot from me. The skills I will learn as a Naval Officer will mold me into an excellent leader and I genuinely believe I can become an asset to the fleet.