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I will be submitting this Motivational Statement on Monday 6/3. But I would love some feedback from those here in the meantime.
Growing up in the shadow of the 9/11 terror attack and witnessing the global war on terror rage, the desire to serve my country was instilled in me at a very young age. I seek a commission in the Navy to enhance my leadership abilities, acquire the skills of an officer, and learn from those who have experienced conflict and triumphed over it.
I believe that leading by example and understanding the responsibilities of your colleagues, both superior and subordinate, are key attributes of a leader. I demonstrated these qualities as a leader in CyberEye during my college years. In this organization, we provided open-source intelligence reports to federal agencies regarding emerging cyber threats. As the lead writer of the briefs, I utilized my knowledge and cyber skills to assist my team members in writing briefs, all while effectively communicating with the executive council and the agencies involved.
During high school, I achieved four consecutive state championships with my wrestling team, despite facing a major injury to my left elbow. Overcoming this setback tested my resilience and adaptability, equipping me with the determination to confront challenges head-on and the discipline to persevere regardless of the odds.
Presently, I work as a Cyber Security Engineer, delivering defensive capabilities to corporations in fast-paced environments and effectively conveying the importance of these measures to executives. It is my aspiration to contribute these skills to the Navy as an Intelligence Officer, ensuring the success of the mission.
This statement is all over the place and it’s not until the very end that the reader knows what the intent of.
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