exNavyOffRec
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This is all that really matters, spend more time studying and less time on a statement that no one will read.
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Motivational Statement MEGA Thread
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The2ndworst
Active Member
Are these really not that important for NA/NFO? My recruiter was making a huge deal about the weight the statements carry.
exNavyOffRec
Well-Known Member
For other designators such as IWC and Supply they can, but for SNA and SNFO it is the scores.
afies
New Member
I am about to go to officer recruiter in the next 2 weeks or so and I have been starting my motivational statement and just wanted to know a few things. A huge reason I want to join is to be a great leader that listens to those I lead while keeping the mission at focus and to be there for the sailors for anything they might need help with so I was wondering would it be weird or out of place to mention hopefully being able to try to help sailors with their mental health as something I could bring the to Navy. I want to clarify by help I don't mean from the medical or therapy perspective but to just be there and feel like they could come to me about what is bothering them and to see if I can make their day just little less stressful and better. appreciate all feedback.
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FormerRecruitingGuru
Making Recruiting Great Again
What are you applying for?
afies
New Member
I will be applying for SWO.
exNavyOffRec
Well-Known Member
You should talk about what you have done, if you have been in a leadership position what you did and what the result was.
There is a chain of command, if there is something bothering them they should be going to their LPO or LCPO and then the LCPO should be telling you what is going on, or the sailor if feels the need should go talk to a doc in medical.
As a JO you are going to be to busy doing your job to be doing the job your LCPO or LPO should be doing.
WorldWar33.3
Well-Known Member
My GPA is trash (2.61 in Communication). Should I even bother addressing it in my statement for SNA? Will board members look through my transcripts and point out my weak semesters?
My ASTB is 6/7/6.
My ASTB is 6/7/6.
WhiskeyWarhead
Member
It’s your only chance to put some justification so why not? Although, tread lightly because as an officer placing blame on others or situations is not how leaders handle failures. Leaders take ownership and learn from their mistakes so I would take that approach. I would make it clear that you learn from your mistakes, learned from them, and are better off. (Maybe things like time management, communication, and discipline or something)
Just my opinion!
WorldWar33.3
Well-Known Member
Thanks man! That's the answer I was looking for!
exNavyOffRec
Well-Known Member
The aviation board rarely if ever reads any motivational statements, you either have the scores that will indicate probably success in flight school or you don't.
OptionsDollaraire
Well-Known Member
Tellin em how it really is lol ?
Rtjenkins
Ricky Jenkins
Your desire is to be pilot right? If so, the aviation community thrives more on your ASTB scores over anything else. 2nd your stat meant isn’t bad, just be clear consume in why you’re a good candidate and what you bring to the table. I like it
68Chev
Well-Known Member
Hello. First time posting in this thread. I would appreciate some honest feedback on my motivational statement. I feel like I should get a bit more detailed but I don't wanna include insignificant stuff or fluff. I also feel like when it comes to the thin line of "sincere" and "cocky/arrogant" I might be on the arrogant side but I cant fully tell.
Hi All,
I am posting my statement here to hopefully get some more eyes on it before I submit! I am a civilian shooting for the next INTEL board (I think in February sometime)...was going to try for November but medical clearance took longer than we expected so I missed the deadline and now I have a complete packet and nothing to do but sit on it and wait for a few months lol.
Here are my stats:
Sex: M
Age: 21
OAR: 62
Degree: BS in Foreign Service (Georgetown University, 3.65, expected May 2023)
Prior Service: No
Waivers: Vision (one eye corrected to 20/25 at MEPS
)
The main thing that I am trying to address in my statement is that I have not really demonstrated much of an interest in the military. It took me a while to find this path—I came to school wanting to do politics, and then switched to banking, and only now in my final year have I fully committed. So I am hoping to use the statement to pre-empt some questions about that.
I have attached it below both in the post and as a Word document. I would really appreciate any feedback! I am desperate to get some sense of where I stand, but it is way too early to have a thread for the next INTEL board, so I am just sitting here freaking out lol. Thanks in advance!
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I have always been attracted to public service. Initially, this took the form of politics, and my goal for most of my young life was to attend Georgetown’s School of Foreign Service. When I accomplished this and got to Washington, I took a series of internships that allowed me to see Capitol Hill and the various public service opportunities there firsthand.
When working in the House of Representatives in the summer of 2021, I was detailed to my office’s defense projects and got my first insight into national security. I also witnessed the fall of Kabul from the perspective of a Congressional staffer. In the chaotic days following, I was peripherally involved in attempts to rescue Americans and American allies still stranded in Afghanistan. These were only partially successful, and my overall feelings were of helplessness and frustration.
My experiences on Capitol Hill were interesting and valuable. However, they also convinced me that, in order to serve my country effectively, I needed to take a more direct approach. After wrapping up my internship in December of 2021, my thoughts turned to the military. Unfortunately, I realized this too late to participate in any ROTC programs, which is why I am applying to the OCS pipeline directly out of college.
Despite my youth, my experience on Capitol Hill, especially with regard to national security, has given me insight into the processes that shape our military’s goals and operations. Additionally, I have taken leadership positions within Georgetown in pre-professional societies such as Georgetown’s Space Initiative, where I served as a Project Leader, and in foreign policy organizations such as the Alexander Hamilton Society, where I served as Treasurer and Director of Outreach. I have also worked as a staff writer for the School of Foreign Service’s in-house foreign affairs newspaper and as the co-founder and President of a bipartisan debating society with a foreign policy focus—both of which exposed me to America’s interests and activities abroad. Throughout my life, I have been afforded the opportunity to live and work in Europe, South America, and the Middle East—experiences that have both allowed me to acquire cultural knowledge firsthand and confirmed my view of the United States as a special place that is worth the service and devotion of its citizens.
In the course of my leadership duties, I have had the opportunity to provide mentorship and guidance to younger students and to lead them in executing professional and political projects, on both a tactical and strategic level. This experience has introduced me to the sorts of difficult decisions that all leaders must make and inculcated me with a sense of duty towards those under my supervision.
In addition to my time on Capitol Hill, I have worked as a geopolitical risk analyst in the banking industry and a regulatory policy analyst in the Fintech industry. These professional experiences have introduced me to data gathering and analysis—notably concerning foreign policy and government operations—and are a significant reason why I feel my skillset is best suited to a position in the Information Warfare community. In this context, I view my experience abroad and in the business world as an asset. It has given me a more holistic perspective on the geopolitical issues facing our nation today.
If allowed to serve my country as an Intelligence Officer, I would hope to apply my professional and governmental experience, hands-on cultural literacy, and deep-seated commitment to public service to protect the United States and its interests in a direct and meaningful way. Serving my nation in such a manner would be the opportunity of a lifetime.
I am posting my statement here to hopefully get some more eyes on it before I submit! I am a civilian shooting for the next INTEL board (I think in February sometime)...was going to try for November but medical clearance took longer than we expected so I missed the deadline and now I have a complete packet and nothing to do but sit on it and wait for a few months lol.
Here are my stats:
Sex: M
Age: 21
OAR: 62
Degree: BS in Foreign Service (Georgetown University, 3.65, expected May 2023)
Prior Service: No
Waivers: Vision (one eye corrected to 20/25 at MEPS
)The main thing that I am trying to address in my statement is that I have not really demonstrated much of an interest in the military. It took me a while to find this path—I came to school wanting to do politics, and then switched to banking, and only now in my final year have I fully committed. So I am hoping to use the statement to pre-empt some questions about that.
I have attached it below both in the post and as a Word document. I would really appreciate any feedback! I am desperate to get some sense of where I stand, but it is way too early to have a thread for the next INTEL board, so I am just sitting here freaking out lol. Thanks in advance!
—————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
I have always been attracted to public service. Initially, this took the form of politics, and my goal for most of my young life was to attend Georgetown’s School of Foreign Service. When I accomplished this and got to Washington, I took a series of internships that allowed me to see Capitol Hill and the various public service opportunities there firsthand.
When working in the House of Representatives in the summer of 2021, I was detailed to my office’s defense projects and got my first insight into national security. I also witnessed the fall of Kabul from the perspective of a Congressional staffer. In the chaotic days following, I was peripherally involved in attempts to rescue Americans and American allies still stranded in Afghanistan. These were only partially successful, and my overall feelings were of helplessness and frustration.
My experiences on Capitol Hill were interesting and valuable. However, they also convinced me that, in order to serve my country effectively, I needed to take a more direct approach. After wrapping up my internship in December of 2021, my thoughts turned to the military. Unfortunately, I realized this too late to participate in any ROTC programs, which is why I am applying to the OCS pipeline directly out of college.
Despite my youth, my experience on Capitol Hill, especially with regard to national security, has given me insight into the processes that shape our military’s goals and operations. Additionally, I have taken leadership positions within Georgetown in pre-professional societies such as Georgetown’s Space Initiative, where I served as a Project Leader, and in foreign policy organizations such as the Alexander Hamilton Society, where I served as Treasurer and Director of Outreach. I have also worked as a staff writer for the School of Foreign Service’s in-house foreign affairs newspaper and as the co-founder and President of a bipartisan debating society with a foreign policy focus—both of which exposed me to America’s interests and activities abroad. Throughout my life, I have been afforded the opportunity to live and work in Europe, South America, and the Middle East—experiences that have both allowed me to acquire cultural knowledge firsthand and confirmed my view of the United States as a special place that is worth the service and devotion of its citizens.
In the course of my leadership duties, I have had the opportunity to provide mentorship and guidance to younger students and to lead them in executing professional and political projects, on both a tactical and strategic level. This experience has introduced me to the sorts of difficult decisions that all leaders must make and inculcated me with a sense of duty towards those under my supervision.
In addition to my time on Capitol Hill, I have worked as a geopolitical risk analyst in the banking industry and a regulatory policy analyst in the Fintech industry. These professional experiences have introduced me to data gathering and analysis—notably concerning foreign policy and government operations—and are a significant reason why I feel my skillset is best suited to a position in the Information Warfare community. In this context, I view my experience abroad and in the business world as an asset. It has given me a more holistic perspective on the geopolitical issues facing our nation today.
If allowed to serve my country as an Intelligence Officer, I would hope to apply my professional and governmental experience, hands-on cultural literacy, and deep-seated commitment to public service to protect the United States and its interests in a direct and meaningful way. Serving my nation in such a manner would be the opportunity of a lifetime.