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Aspiring Navy SNA/NFO
Hey y'all, I'm reapplying for OCS and am seeking critique on my motivational statement and application remarks statement. I don't really understand the purpose of my application remarks statement, but I want to tune it up and sell myself as best as possible of course. Can y'all please weigh in?
MOTIVATIONAL STATEMENT:
In Sikhism, Seva, or selfless service, is defined as any act or effort performed for the betterment of your fellow man without any concern for your personal benefit. It is more than a community service; it is a commitment to protect and help those in need. Growing up in a family of Punjabi Indian-Americans, I was taught these concepts at a young age. My desire is to perform Seva for the greatest country on earth, the United States of America, the land that gave my family a chance to flourish and prosper, by joining the most capable and active service branch, the United States Navy.
Since my early childhood, I have always considered the military in some capacity and sought out community-service opportunities that promoted teamwork. My boy scout troop provided leadership courses, camping trips, and merit badge clinics which guided me to achieving my Eagle Scout award while my parents were busy operating their own business and raising three children. In addition to the values of scouting, a heavy emphasis was placed on patriotic duty by our adult leaders, many of whom were Army and Navy veterans. I can contribute to the Navy’s mission by exhibiting those same values while upholding the esprit de corps of any unit I may be assigned to.
During my college career, I pursued opportunities to learn as much as I could in a hands-on environment to grow my logistics career, but I felt dissatisfied with a conventional corporate career. Outside of the classroom and office, I rose to the occasion twice as an emergency responder; once during my freshman year by assisting the victim of a fatal moped accident, and again during my junior year by rescuing a fellow member of the outdoor club who was drowning during a kayak trip. These experiences reminded me of what is most important to my set of morals and values: performing Seva.
Despite these experiences, my journey led me to careers in healthcare, manufacturing and supply chain, and hospitality. Through these occupations I learned how to deal with interpersonal difficulties, organizational change, and the burden of leadership. My post grad work experiences were cut short by COVID-19, and my journey led me back home to Atlanta to perform Seva for my family by expanding and selling our specialty dental practice to help my parents retire. During this undertaking, I exercised my leadership and problem-solving skills by guiding a team of over 15 dental assistants and endodontists to develop our practice. Orchestrating this undertaking tested me in the arenas of problem-solving, adaptive learning, communication, and personal responsibility.
I refined my life goals and career aspirations to a few core tenets; to directly help those in need, to work in a team-oriented setting, and to master technical hands-on skills. Ultimately, my goal is to be a Naval officer in the aviation community, focusing on leading aviation, emergency management, and search and rescue operational support. My aviation career is already set in motion by my current pursuit of a civilian commercial pilot’s license. By applying my accrued experience and leadership skills, I will help develop our personnel for all unpredictable challenges that our country might face. No matter the direction, my destination will ultimately be performing Seva for those around me, and it would be my privilege and honor for the Navy to be the route I take to reach this destination.
PERSONAL REMARKS:
I have no other criminal charges or infractions since my only misdemeanor case from October, 2013, except for the odd traffic citation, which I always appeal and attempt to rectify in traffic court. I have made every effort to live a righteous and law-abiding life via gainful employment and community contributions. Multiple previous jobs have required drug testing and continued demonstration of good conduct, and I have successfully stayed the course without incident.
MOTIVATIONAL STATEMENT:
In Sikhism, Seva, or selfless service, is defined as any act or effort performed for the betterment of your fellow man without any concern for your personal benefit. It is more than a community service; it is a commitment to protect and help those in need. Growing up in a family of Punjabi Indian-Americans, I was taught these concepts at a young age. My desire is to perform Seva for the greatest country on earth, the United States of America, the land that gave my family a chance to flourish and prosper, by joining the most capable and active service branch, the United States Navy.
Since my early childhood, I have always considered the military in some capacity and sought out community-service opportunities that promoted teamwork. My boy scout troop provided leadership courses, camping trips, and merit badge clinics which guided me to achieving my Eagle Scout award while my parents were busy operating their own business and raising three children. In addition to the values of scouting, a heavy emphasis was placed on patriotic duty by our adult leaders, many of whom were Army and Navy veterans. I can contribute to the Navy’s mission by exhibiting those same values while upholding the esprit de corps of any unit I may be assigned to.
During my college career, I pursued opportunities to learn as much as I could in a hands-on environment to grow my logistics career, but I felt dissatisfied with a conventional corporate career. Outside of the classroom and office, I rose to the occasion twice as an emergency responder; once during my freshman year by assisting the victim of a fatal moped accident, and again during my junior year by rescuing a fellow member of the outdoor club who was drowning during a kayak trip. These experiences reminded me of what is most important to my set of morals and values: performing Seva.
Despite these experiences, my journey led me to careers in healthcare, manufacturing and supply chain, and hospitality. Through these occupations I learned how to deal with interpersonal difficulties, organizational change, and the burden of leadership. My post grad work experiences were cut short by COVID-19, and my journey led me back home to Atlanta to perform Seva for my family by expanding and selling our specialty dental practice to help my parents retire. During this undertaking, I exercised my leadership and problem-solving skills by guiding a team of over 15 dental assistants and endodontists to develop our practice. Orchestrating this undertaking tested me in the arenas of problem-solving, adaptive learning, communication, and personal responsibility.
I refined my life goals and career aspirations to a few core tenets; to directly help those in need, to work in a team-oriented setting, and to master technical hands-on skills. Ultimately, my goal is to be a Naval officer in the aviation community, focusing on leading aviation, emergency management, and search and rescue operational support. My aviation career is already set in motion by my current pursuit of a civilian commercial pilot’s license. By applying my accrued experience and leadership skills, I will help develop our personnel for all unpredictable challenges that our country might face. No matter the direction, my destination will ultimately be performing Seva for those around me, and it would be my privilege and honor for the Navy to be the route I take to reach this destination.
PERSONAL REMARKS:
I have no other criminal charges or infractions since my only misdemeanor case from October, 2013, except for the odd traffic citation, which I always appeal and attempt to rectify in traffic court. I have made every effort to live a righteous and law-abiding life via gainful employment and community contributions. Multiple previous jobs have required drug testing and continued demonstration of good conduct, and I have successfully stayed the course without incident.
