Hey,
I finally finished a rough draft for my new statement and I was wondering if you would be so kind as to look over it. As of right now I am at 499 words, is that alright or am I going to have to slim it down? Any and all help would be appreicated.
I hope to become a naval officer because I believe that it would be a good opportunity to defend my country while engaging in a career that is both cutting edge and incredibly rewarding. This statement is to prove that I will not fail the strict traditions and standards of being a US Naval Officer. Every time I speak with a Naval Officer, it ensures me that the Navy is the right career path for me. Being a Naval Officer might not be an easy career choice. I know every sacrifice that I will make is worth the fulfillment of having a job I find exciting and important. I wish to be reconsidered for an Officer Candidate School appointment.
Preparing myself to be a Naval Officer ranges from physical fitness to academic pursuits. I work daily to ensure that I will surpass the physical standards required by the United States Navy. I know that my GPA is not the best but I do not feel that it is an indication of my potential. In preparation for becoming a Naval Officer I have been studying more effective ways to communicate. Mission Success can only be accomplished by maintaining correct and current information in the chain of command vertically, and horizontally alike. Understanding the principles of aerodynamics are the keys to success, however they only form the stepping stones in which everything else rests. I am setting myself up for success by being ahead of the competition in regards to situational awareness and target recognition. I have spent my life around military aviation and have learned a great deal about aircraft.
I am supremely confident in my ability to become a Naval Officer. Whether it is leading people or becoming a Naval Aviator I will only give my best. During college I showed leadership skills while coaching my former swim team. I had the responsibility of planning and executing daily practices while maintaining discipline for the entire team. While overseeing the whole team’s needs I also had to ensure each individual was prepared for the upcoming swim meets. Many times in my life I have heard that leading people is similar to raising children. Recently I was asked to help take care of two young children. Their parents are dual military and good friends of mine, unfortunately both had to be away. This has taught me patience and a sense of responsibility I have never before experienced.
Ever since my father took me to the UH-60 simulator at Simmons Airfield in North Carolina, I knew flying was what I wanted to pursue. Having grown up in a military family I understand the sacrifices that must be made by a service member and their family. The ability to serve and defend my country outweighs the sacrifices that I will make. I find a great deal of pride in serving my country. This career is an important responsibility and I would be honored to be given the chance to become a Naval Officer.
Very Respectfully,
Rob~XeroCool
I finally finished a rough draft for my new statement and I was wondering if you would be so kind as to look over it. As of right now I am at 499 words, is that alright or am I going to have to slim it down? Any and all help would be appreicated.
I hope to become a naval officer because I believe that it would be a good opportunity to defend my country while engaging in a career that is both cutting edge and incredibly rewarding. This statement is to prove that I will not fail the strict traditions and standards of being a US Naval Officer. Every time I speak with a Naval Officer, it ensures me that the Navy is the right career path for me. Being a Naval Officer might not be an easy career choice. I know every sacrifice that I will make is worth the fulfillment of having a job I find exciting and important. I wish to be reconsidered for an Officer Candidate School appointment.
Preparing myself to be a Naval Officer ranges from physical fitness to academic pursuits. I work daily to ensure that I will surpass the physical standards required by the United States Navy. I know that my GPA is not the best but I do not feel that it is an indication of my potential. In preparation for becoming a Naval Officer I have been studying more effective ways to communicate. Mission Success can only be accomplished by maintaining correct and current information in the chain of command vertically, and horizontally alike. Understanding the principles of aerodynamics are the keys to success, however they only form the stepping stones in which everything else rests. I am setting myself up for success by being ahead of the competition in regards to situational awareness and target recognition. I have spent my life around military aviation and have learned a great deal about aircraft.
I am supremely confident in my ability to become a Naval Officer. Whether it is leading people or becoming a Naval Aviator I will only give my best. During college I showed leadership skills while coaching my former swim team. I had the responsibility of planning and executing daily practices while maintaining discipline for the entire team. While overseeing the whole team’s needs I also had to ensure each individual was prepared for the upcoming swim meets. Many times in my life I have heard that leading people is similar to raising children. Recently I was asked to help take care of two young children. Their parents are dual military and good friends of mine, unfortunately both had to be away. This has taught me patience and a sense of responsibility I have never before experienced.
Ever since my father took me to the UH-60 simulator at Simmons Airfield in North Carolina, I knew flying was what I wanted to pursue. Having grown up in a military family I understand the sacrifices that must be made by a service member and their family. The ability to serve and defend my country outweighs the sacrifices that I will make. I find a great deal of pride in serving my country. This career is an important responsibility and I would be honored to be given the chance to become a Naval Officer.
Very Respectfully,
Rob~XeroCool