jride200
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Okay ladies and gentlemen . . .
This is nothing new to this forum. I'd like to post a draft of my motivational statement. I hope to use the collective knowledge and learn how to make it better. Realizing the members of this community must read a lot of motivational statements, I hope you can think back to when you wrote your own statement and remember how important it was to you.
Thanks so much, Jason
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As a child, I recall first seeing US Navy ships while vacationing with my grandparents in San Diego. I was, and I remain, in awe of the size and presence of naval ships. As an adult, naval ships have come to represent much more to me—so much so, in fact, that I now aspire to become a naval officer. Although difficult to do using so few words, it is my intent to summarize the reasons for my aspiration with this writing.
I seek a career after graduation representing more than corporate profits. I believe in the basic premise upon which the United States was founded, namely democracy, and I desire to enter the service of my fellow citizens empowered through democracy. Ours is a beautiful, vibrant nation with a colorful, diverse population and fascinating history and culture. Opportunities and freedoms, greater than those available anywhere else in the world make me feel incredibly fortunate to be an American. I desire to protect these wonderful things.
It has been a difficult path earning my bachelor’s degree. I now seek another difficult path: to become a naval officer. Enormous amounts of tradition, camaraderie, and above all, honor exist in the US Navy. These qualities are a direct result of the quality of leadership provided by naval officers. Both of my grandfathers were enlisted in the US Navy and they sweated in the boiler rooms of their respective ships. Each would tell stories reflecting upon the quality of leadership that they were given. I know that although they have both passed on, it would make them proud to see me become an officer like those they so respected.
As an aside, my first preference is to become a Naval Aviator. The Navy Flyer’s Creed states, “My countrymen built the best airplane in the world.” Naval aviation is a vivid example of our nation’s industrial, and resulting military, strength. Skilled workers in my hometown of St. Louis, Missouri build many naval aircraft and I feel I have a shared bond with the workers building these aircraft; I too have labored many an overnight shift in industry. I aspire to make the workers of America proud flying their aircraft with all of my dedication and determination. To again refer to the Navy Flyer’s Creed: “They and their way of life are worthy of my greatest protective effort.” I am ready to put forth this effort.
This is nothing new to this forum. I'd like to post a draft of my motivational statement. I hope to use the collective knowledge and learn how to make it better. Realizing the members of this community must read a lot of motivational statements, I hope you can think back to when you wrote your own statement and remember how important it was to you.
Thanks so much, Jason
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As a child, I recall first seeing US Navy ships while vacationing with my grandparents in San Diego. I was, and I remain, in awe of the size and presence of naval ships. As an adult, naval ships have come to represent much more to me—so much so, in fact, that I now aspire to become a naval officer. Although difficult to do using so few words, it is my intent to summarize the reasons for my aspiration with this writing.
I seek a career after graduation representing more than corporate profits. I believe in the basic premise upon which the United States was founded, namely democracy, and I desire to enter the service of my fellow citizens empowered through democracy. Ours is a beautiful, vibrant nation with a colorful, diverse population and fascinating history and culture. Opportunities and freedoms, greater than those available anywhere else in the world make me feel incredibly fortunate to be an American. I desire to protect these wonderful things.
It has been a difficult path earning my bachelor’s degree. I now seek another difficult path: to become a naval officer. Enormous amounts of tradition, camaraderie, and above all, honor exist in the US Navy. These qualities are a direct result of the quality of leadership provided by naval officers. Both of my grandfathers were enlisted in the US Navy and they sweated in the boiler rooms of their respective ships. Each would tell stories reflecting upon the quality of leadership that they were given. I know that although they have both passed on, it would make them proud to see me become an officer like those they so respected.
As an aside, my first preference is to become a Naval Aviator. The Navy Flyer’s Creed states, “My countrymen built the best airplane in the world.” Naval aviation is a vivid example of our nation’s industrial, and resulting military, strength. Skilled workers in my hometown of St. Louis, Missouri build many naval aircraft and I feel I have a shared bond with the workers building these aircraft; I too have labored many an overnight shift in industry. I aspire to make the workers of America proud flying their aircraft with all of my dedication and determination. To again refer to the Navy Flyer’s Creed: “They and their way of life are worthy of my greatest protective effort.” I am ready to put forth this effort.
