Here is my first draft of my motivational statement. Any suggestions?
Becoming a Commissioned Officer in the United States Navy is a question of character. It’s not just a pay, a job, or a uniform, but it is about the service to your country. Being a Commissioned Officer in the Navy is about showing love to your country and the love for freedom that Navy protects everyday. Learning how to follow, respect, and lead others in the heat of the battle and in garrison, is what a Commissioned Officer is all about. The love for my country, a willingness to learn, and the desire to lead is what drives me to become a distinguished Commissioned Officer of the United Sates Navy.
I was born in Russia in 1982. Although I was too young to remember how communism was like, my dad has told me a lot of stories about how there was no freedom to speak up for or against the government, no freedom to own your own business or a house, and of course, no freedom of religion. Growing up in this country made me realize how blessed I am to live here. No other country has the freedom that we enjoy here in the U.S. The freedom that thousands and thousands of brave men and women has died for. Most people do not realize the freedom they enjoy. Hearing the criticism on the news about the military today is what motivates even more to love my country and to serve proudly.
While serving in the Army, I realized that a career in the military is what I wanted. I left the Army, after I proudly served for 3 and half years, to pursue my degree in Transportation and Logistics and get on a path to getting commissioned. The Navy is where I would be honored to serve my country as an officer. With the training the Navy provides today, my eagerness to learn, follow and lead, my prior experience in the Army, and the love for freedom, I know I will grab hold of the opportunities and challenges being a Navy have to offer me as the officer of the most powerful Navy in the world.
Becoming a Commissioned Officer in the United States Navy is a question of character. It’s not just a pay, a job, or a uniform, but it is about the service to your country. Being a Commissioned Officer in the Navy is about showing love to your country and the love for freedom that Navy protects everyday. Learning how to follow, respect, and lead others in the heat of the battle and in garrison, is what a Commissioned Officer is all about. The love for my country, a willingness to learn, and the desire to lead is what drives me to become a distinguished Commissioned Officer of the United Sates Navy.
I was born in Russia in 1982. Although I was too young to remember how communism was like, my dad has told me a lot of stories about how there was no freedom to speak up for or against the government, no freedom to own your own business or a house, and of course, no freedom of religion. Growing up in this country made me realize how blessed I am to live here. No other country has the freedom that we enjoy here in the U.S. The freedom that thousands and thousands of brave men and women has died for. Most people do not realize the freedom they enjoy. Hearing the criticism on the news about the military today is what motivates even more to love my country and to serve proudly.
While serving in the Army, I realized that a career in the military is what I wanted. I left the Army, after I proudly served for 3 and half years, to pursue my degree in Transportation and Logistics and get on a path to getting commissioned. The Navy is where I would be honored to serve my country as an officer. With the training the Navy provides today, my eagerness to learn, follow and lead, my prior experience in the Army, and the love for freedom, I know I will grab hold of the opportunities and challenges being a Navy have to offer me as the officer of the most powerful Navy in the world.