Good Evening,
Hopefully I am not hijacking this thread or taking away from any previous posters. Here is the rough draft of my motivational statement. I have done only a small amount of research and the census seems to be that the two questions needed to be answered are, 1. Why do I want to join the Navy, and 2. Why should I be chosen. Please feel free to elaborate if I am misinformed. I would greatly appreciate any constructive criticism. If your wondering why I am applying Navy as a former Marine, the Marine Corps OSO said I was too old but Navy says I'm not, doesn't make sense they work off the same age regs I thought. I'm 28, will be 28 1/2 when I graduate.
Thank you in advance,
Jeremy
From an early age I developed a tremendous respect for my country and those who have fought to preserve it. As a boy I recall my grandfather, a Korean Conflict veteran and mentor, recounting events that would make the weak of heart and stomach cringe. Though he braved brutal conditions, sustained multiple combat injuries, and embraced his best friend drawing his final breath on the battlefield; my grandfather remained a true and loyal patriot. He picked up his rifle and fought, fought so that I/we could have a better way of life. Many years later I would carry on his legacy by enlisting in the United States Marine Corps. As a marine I learned the true value of leadership. Every marine is a leader but I was given the opportunity to prove it. Rather than standing idly by awaiting the end of my obligation I took initiative obtained two secondary MOS’s. As primary marksmanship instructor for 4th Air Naval Gunfire Liaison Company I was given the unique opportunity to demonstrate competency in my specialty and leadership abilities. I was entrusted by the Commanding Officer to ensure Marines and Sailors awaiting theater deployment were weapon proficient and combat ready. After 5 combat deployments 4th ANGLICO suffered zero fatalities and only several combat related injuries. Subsequently, my fabrication and development of the S-1 travel claim tracking system would prove vital to mission accomplishment. My efforts, in conjunction with three fellow marines produced the highest MCAAT (administrative inspection) score (95.83) in the history of 4th ANGLICO; ultimately being commended by Commanding Officer Lt. Col. Ahern for exhibiting exemplary administrative knowledge, skills, and dedication to the Marine Corps. Not only as a Marine, but as a person I constantly strive to better myself. In the civilian world I have nurtured my leadership and communication skills through the management of small business, as a licensed realtor, and volunteering in the Civil Air Patrol. Though I have always dreamed of becoming a naval aviator, family obligations have hindered my progress. Now back on track and determined as ever, I have earned my private pilot certificate in only 47.8 hours and I am as enthusiastic about aviation as day one. In conclusion, the caliber of military officers produced by the Navy and Marine Corps are without doubt the worlds finest, I am motivated, dedicated, and without doubt have what it takes to lead the world’s finest navy.
