bosaviator79
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Just wondering if any of you could take some time and review my motivational essay for the officer app? I should also introduce myself. My name is Shane I'm 28 yrs old. I'm prior enlisted Air Force, seperated then attended ERAU in Daytona. I'm a commercial SEL pilot serving as a check pilot and records analyst for a FAA 135 repair station in Colorado. I'm currently applying for a pilot slot. I appreciate any honest feedback, and don't hold back I can take and am appreciative of any constructive criticism(s). Great site by the way! Thanks
"My desire to seek a commission in the U.S. Navy is motivated by my willingness to serve my country, lead a committed team, continue my family’s military legacy, and lastly, utilize my piloting skills in defense of my country. Though this is not an exclusive list of why I want to serve as a naval officer, I believe it represents the core of my decision to take this path of service.
As a prior service member, I understand the sacrifice the military requires and it is a commitment I can easily make. Because of what this nation has provided me, my integrity insists that I give something in return by continuing my service as a naval officer. I do not see this as a debt, but I accept it as an opportunity to be part of something that has true meaning.
I believe there is nothing we can’t accomplish as a committed team. As a leader, I do not place myself above those in my charge, but recognize my position as an integral member of the team. I accept this responsibility, and seek to motivate my team to accomplish the mission. The opportunity to lead and be a part of a team is a great honor that is seldom found outside of the Armed Forces; I feel this is my calling.
Nearly 90% of my family has served in the armed services. I’ve witnessed the camaraderie shared, and experienced the dedication and sacrifice that has been and will be required of me. I accept this not as an obligation, but as a way to celebrate the service of my predecessors.
As a student of aviation I have accomplished my dream of flight by becoming a commercial pilot. I have found my gift in life and couldn’t imagine doing anything else. However, I believe a gift is truly meant to be used for the common good of all. I elect to do this as a naval aviator and utilize my piloting skills in the defense of my nation.
The decision to seek commission in the U.S. Navy has not been taken lightly. Though my motivations are too numerous to list in this statement, they are entirely genuine. I eagerly await the opportunity to serve my country, lead a committed team and continue my family’s legacy by becoming a naval aviator."
"My desire to seek a commission in the U.S. Navy is motivated by my willingness to serve my country, lead a committed team, continue my family’s military legacy, and lastly, utilize my piloting skills in defense of my country. Though this is not an exclusive list of why I want to serve as a naval officer, I believe it represents the core of my decision to take this path of service.
As a prior service member, I understand the sacrifice the military requires and it is a commitment I can easily make. Because of what this nation has provided me, my integrity insists that I give something in return by continuing my service as a naval officer. I do not see this as a debt, but I accept it as an opportunity to be part of something that has true meaning.
I believe there is nothing we can’t accomplish as a committed team. As a leader, I do not place myself above those in my charge, but recognize my position as an integral member of the team. I accept this responsibility, and seek to motivate my team to accomplish the mission. The opportunity to lead and be a part of a team is a great honor that is seldom found outside of the Armed Forces; I feel this is my calling.
Nearly 90% of my family has served in the armed services. I’ve witnessed the camaraderie shared, and experienced the dedication and sacrifice that has been and will be required of me. I accept this not as an obligation, but as a way to celebrate the service of my predecessors.
As a student of aviation I have accomplished my dream of flight by becoming a commercial pilot. I have found my gift in life and couldn’t imagine doing anything else. However, I believe a gift is truly meant to be used for the common good of all. I elect to do this as a naval aviator and utilize my piloting skills in the defense of my nation.
The decision to seek commission in the U.S. Navy has not been taken lightly. Though my motivations are too numerous to list in this statement, they are entirely genuine. I eagerly await the opportunity to serve my country, lead a committed team and continue my family’s legacy by becoming a naval aviator."
