Here was mine:
I am seeking a commission for several reasons, but my primary aim is to give something back to a nation that has allowed me to live free and safe for twenty-two years, and to do my part to help protect it from all threats, both internal and external. Pursuant to this goal, I wish to be in a position of optimal effectiveness in the context of service to my country, and I feel my skills and capabilities are best suited to the tasks assigned to a United States Naval Officer. My sense of duty and obligation to defend those who are unable to fight for themselves has led me to this conclusion and this undertaking. I am a very motivated and focused individual who thrives under pressure and is willing and able to accept responsibility for difficult jobs and for the performance of my peers, and I believe these traits will be vital to success, and allow me to excel in the vocation of an Officer. I also seek a career that is secure, important, honest, honorable, satisfying, and makes a distinct difference in the world. I also long to work in an environment that is truly non-discriminatory, where opportunities are earned, not given, and hard work is rewarded and valued; a place where excellence is expected, appreciated, and encouraged. I feel a career as a Naval Officer will provide that and much more. I also wish to become an Officer in order to be an example to others in similar situations and of like mind and potential, to show them that they can do something exceptional with their lives if they have the proper motivation and determination. Finally, though of no less significance, I desire an opportunity to improve myself beyond the limits I am currently required to operate within, and do something with my life that I can be proud of in the future. I strongly believe that earning a commission will present this opportunity, and will help me to become the person I want to be.