Alright, I need to write a short manifesto on the motivational statement and get it stickied. I have mentioned this before and will keep mentioning it.
Don't overthink the motivational statement. I needs to be a clear 5 paragraph essay that says why you want to be in the Navy and what you would bring to the table.
Good reasons you want to join:
- Love United States
-Want to serve
-Love challenges
-You are a leader
-Like teamwork
-etc., etc.,
Good things you bring to the table:
-Leadership experience
-Goal/Detail oriented
-Driven to succeed
-Will be better than the next guy
-etc., etc.,
Bad things:
-I know every variant of every fighter ever flown and I already know the JSF NATOPS by heart.
-My flight sim score beat everybody on my floor at ERAU.
-The Navy will be a good stepping stone for my career outside.
-Chicks dig the unifom and I could use some help in that department (Girls do like the uniform, but only because it stands for an elite group; a dork in chokers is a dork none-the-less.)
Notice that there is some overlap here; many things can be both.
The motivational statement is not something that will make you look great if it is unbelievable; the unbelievable motivational statement does not exist. However, crappy ones do and they can sink you if it brings you attention.
Don't overthink it. Have an English major look over it for you, make it grammatically/stylisticly clean, and send it in.
VP Love,
RockyMtnNFO