FY17 STA-21 Applicants

[gale4380]

You can apply for any designator you are eligible for. You do not HAVE to be a Nuke Officer. However, with the quotas being high for Nuke it would behoove you to apply Nuke.

Thx..

 

[brysonkgoforth]

Anyone need/want a package review? I would love to help anyone interested in grooming next year's package!

Brysonkgoforth@gmail.com

Hit me up!

 

[AG_2_1800_hopeful]

Hello, first time posting on this site. I wrote my Personal Statement during the last deployment. May I please have some feedback?

I know it's early haha

Thank you for your time!


Personal Statement


I would like to express to you my matchless enthusiasm to participate in the Seaman to Admiral (STA-21) program and earn a commission in the United States Navy. My experiences, motivation and values embrace the highest standards and traditions of the Navy and will easily contribute to and diversify the wardroom. I am currently applying for the Pilot (Primary) and CORE (Secondary) options.


The desire and passion to be in the military has reformed my attitude to become someone better than I ever was before. After my high school career, I went to pursue my passion for military aviation at Liberty University and participated in AFROTC at the University of Virginia. In college I vastly improved my academics and completed a total of 39 credit hours. Unfortunately, due to the high cost of education, I could no longer afford to attend college. Faced with a challenging situation, I knew that I wanted to become an officer and was willing to go the long route to accomplish my goal. After further research of military branches, I learned that the Navy was really the right place for me and enlisted on October 3rd, 2013.


My career with the Navy indicates that I have the attributes and aptitude to be a successful leader in any situation. During my first few weeks of Boot Camp, I was chosen to become the division’s Port Flag Carrier. While not typically a leadership position, it didn’t prevent me from displaying my abilities as a leader and a team player. My Recruit Division Commanders recognized me as a top performer in my division and meritoriously promoted me to Seaman. Following Boot Camp, I was appointed as class leader at my A-School, Entry-Level ELINT, giving me the incredible opportunity to lead future Cryptologic Technicians. Under my leadership, class 14050 graduated with a class GPA of 94.5% and no failures


At my first command, USS Farragut (DDG-99), I was able to learn from some of the best leaders the Navy has to offer. My chain of command gave me countless opportunities to learn, teach and lead Sailors, which prepared me for a successful 8 month deployment with the Theodore Roosevelt Carrier Strike Group. During my tour I received a nomination as Blue Jacket of the Quarter, was awarded the Navy and Marine Corps Achievement Medal and earned my Enlisted Surface Warfare Specialist insignia. I was promoted to Petty Officer Third Class off of my first advancement exam and established myself in the top 3 percentile of test takers during that exam cycle.


At the age of 14, I landed my first plane on Runway 23 at Morristown Municipal Airport, initiating my passion of becoming an aviator that quickly developed into something more meaningful. My interest in aviation has been noticed by my peers and earned me the nickname of “Mr. Pilot” onboard USS Farragut.


Upon selection to the STA-21 program, my goal is to pursue a degree in Computer Science at Rutgers State University in New Jersey. A degree in Computer Science will prepare me for the rigorous curriculum as a Student Naval Aviator and prepare me for the challenges of understanding advanced technology as the Navy evolves. Along with taking college courses, I plan on taking private flight lessons on my own time to help further my knowledge of aviation so that I can be a strong student and pilot for the Navy.



This is a life changing opportunity; when selected there is plenty of myself give back to the Navy, as it has invested so much in me. Being enlisted in the Navy has made me a more confident, disciplined and mature person than I was years ago. It made me ready to face new challenges and tackle more responsibilities. I am confident in my abilities to complete and exceed all requirements for the STA-21 program and pilot option.





Dillon Alberto Pontes

Hi Mr. Pontes,

This is a good start for your personal statement. A suggestion though.... this is your one and only page to express to the board why the Navy NEEDS to commission you. You could let them know how you intend to better the Fleet, enhance the Sailors entrusted to you to lead, better tha Navy, etc. I would refrain from mentioning all the accomplishments you attained before getting to this point, all of those should be reflected in the rest of your package via evals, LOA's, LOR's etc. and is therefore redundant to mention here.

Hope that helps a bit!

Very Respectfully,
ENS Beemiller (FY-12 selectee)

 

[Hair Warrior]

Hello, first time posting on this site. I wrote my Personal Statement during the last deployment. May I please have some feedback?

I know it's early haha

Thank you for your time!


Personal Statement


I would like to express to you my matchless enthusiasm to participate in the Seaman to Admiral (STA-21) program and earn a commission in the United States Navy. My experiences, motivation and values embrace the highest standards and traditions of the Navy and will easily contribute to and diversify the wardroom. I am currently applying for the Pilot (Primary) and CORE (Secondary) options.


The desire and passion to be in the military has reformed my attitude to become someone better than I ever was before. After my high school career, I went to pursue my passion for military aviation at Liberty University and participated in AFROTC at the University of Virginia. In college I vastly improved my academics and completed a total of 39 credit hours. Unfortunately, due to the high cost of education, I could no longer afford to attend college. Faced with a challenging situation, I knew that I wanted to become an officer and was willing to go the long route to accomplish my goal. After further research of military branches, I learned that the Navy was really the right place for me and enlisted on October 3rd, 2013.


My career with the Navy indicates that I have the attributes and aptitude to be a successful leader in any situation. During my first few weeks of Boot Camp, I was chosen to become the division’s Port Flag Carrier. While not typically a leadership position, it didn’t prevent me from displaying my abilities as a leader and a team player. My Recruit Division Commanders recognized me as a top performer in my division and meritoriously promoted me to Seaman. Following Boot Camp, I was appointed as class leader at my A-School, Entry-Level ELINT, giving me the incredible opportunity to lead future Cryptologic Technicians. Under my leadership, class 14050 graduated with a class GPA of 94.5% and no failures


At my first command, USS Farragut (DDG-99), I was able to learn from some of the best leaders the Navy has to offer. My chain of command gave me countless opportunities to learn, teach and lead Sailors, which prepared me for a successful 8 month deployment with the Theodore Roosevelt Carrier Strike Group. During my tour I received a nomination as Blue Jacket of the Quarter, was awarded the Navy and Marine Corps Achievement Medal and earned my Enlisted Surface Warfare Specialist insignia. I was promoted to Petty Officer Third Class off of my first advancement exam and established myself in the top 3 percentile of test takers during that exam cycle.


At the age of 14, I landed my first plane on Runway 23 at Morristown Municipal Airport, initiating my passion of becoming an aviator that quickly developed into something more meaningful. My interest in aviation has been noticed by my peers and earned me the nickname of “Mr. Pilot” onboard USS Farragut.


Upon selection to the STA-21 program, my goal is to pursue a degree in Computer Science at Rutgers State University in New Jersey. A degree in Computer Science will prepare me for the rigorous curriculum as a Student Naval Aviator and prepare me for the challenges of understanding advanced technology as the Navy evolves. Along with taking college courses, I plan on taking private flight lessons on my own time to help further my knowledge of aviation so that I can be a strong student and pilot for the Navy.



This is a life changing opportunity; when selected there is plenty of myself give back to the Navy, as it has invested so much in me. Being enlisted in the Navy has made me a more confident, disciplined and mature person than I was years ago. It made me ready to face new challenges and tackle more responsibilities. I am confident in my abilities to complete and exceed all requirements for the STA-21 program and pilot option.





Dillon Alberto Pontes

Great statement. My suggestion would be to omit adverbs or adjectives that do not change the meaning of the word they modify. This would make it more concise while cutting fluff. Courtesy of Roy Peter Clark, Writing Tools.

For instance: "He smiled happily." - we can delete 'happily' and the sentence means the same thing.
"He smiled sadly." - every word is essential.

I think it can apply to...
"matchless enthusiasm"
"easily contribute"
"currently applying"
"vastly improved"
You get the idea.

Also, wherever you can eliminate a word or more while retaining the meaning, do it.
"went to pursue" becomes "pursued"

Good luck, shipmate!

 

[HDND]

How is everyone's packages coming along. I have my CO interview Next week and external interview in May. Good luck everyone, its time to start wrapping everything up.

 

[ML_METOC]

RATE/RANK: AG1
APPLYING FOR: OCEANOGRAPHY
EVALS: P, MP, P, EP, P (Lots of variation due to frocking, check-out/in)
SMART: ~50 Credit Hours
COLLEGE: Chemeketa Community College (Associate of Arts, 2015 3.87 GPA, National Phi Theta Kappa Honor Society); Oregon State University (2015 to present) 3.72 GPA as of now.
HIGH SCHOOL: ~2.3 GPA (Long time ago)
LEADERSHIP: (Total past and present) DIV LPO, Command Security Manager, MWR Vice President, CPO365 Coordinator, FCPOA Treasurer, Forward-Deployed NCOIC (Joint), Watchfloor Supervisor, Football Coach.
AWARDS: 1 x JCOM, 2 x JSAM, 3 x NAM, CAR, various unit and campaign.
TIS: 8 years
SAT: Taking the official on May 7th. Practice SAT: 560 Math/ 550 English
WARFARE QUALS: IDW, EXW
PRT: Good, Good, Good
LORs: LCDR, CDR, LtCol
MISC: Various volunteer hours, Command Assessment Team, Initiated and formed my detachment's CPO 365 program and FCPOA.

 

[ML_METOC]

From my understanding, the internal and external boards have to have at least 3 mbrs, correct?

 

[ML_METOC]

How is everyone's packages coming along. I have my CO interview Next week and external interview in May. Good luck everyone, its time to start wrapping everything up.

Going well. I'm overseas so a lot of my command-related stuff has been delayed. Have to wait until May to take the SATs as well. Its been frustrating but hopefully it pays off in the end.

 

[Dg2016]

yes the external is 3 members, but most commands wil not move foward until you have your official sat scores so i would inquire about that

 

[ML_METOC]

yes the external is 3 members, but most commands wil not move foward until you have your official sat scores so i would inquire about that

Thanks for the info. The command's possible hesitation is understandable.

My command should be tracking my situation, and hopefully they will still support. The powers that be don't offer the SAT/ACT nearly as much overseas as they do in the US. I'm actually taking leave in order to go to the US and take the test, just so the results will be in time for the postmark date.

 

[brysonkgoforth]

Umm.....it's May....Do you guys and girls even STA-21?

Someone please use this forum to chat about STA-21. I can't stand to see it be reduced to this.

 

[Dg2016]

I'm doing my COs recommendation letter tomorrow. I got my prt tomorrow as well and just waiting on my official SAT scores that were mailed 2 weeks ago. I qualified but the rush order college board system is down so I'm out of luck. Pushed my internal boards back a week but still tracking for time. Anyone else going for Oceanography?

 

[ML_METOC]

I'm doing my COs recommendation letter tomorrow. I got my prt tomorrow as well and just waiting on my official SAT scores that were mailed 2 weeks ago. I qualified but the rush order college board system is down so I'm out of luck. Pushed my internal boards back a week but still tracking for time. Anyone else going for Oceanography?

Oceanography hopeful here. Doing my SAT tomorrow and internal officers board this week. Seems like overall interest in the STA program is dwindling in the last several years. Wonder if commands are promoting it like they used to or if overall interest is not there.

I've been waiting 6 years to apply. Because of schooling and command limitations on endorsing any officer programs, I haven't had a shot since 2009. Looking forward to finally getting a look.

How's your package coming along?

 

[Dg2016]

Oceanography hopeful here. Doing my SAT tomorrow and internal officers board this week. Seems like overall interest in the STA program is dwindling in the last several years. Wonder if commands are promoting it like they used to or if overall interest is not there.



I've been waiting 6 years to apply. Because of schooling and command limitations on endorsing any officer programs, I haven't had a shot since 2009. Looking forward to finally getting a look.

How's your package coming along?

Your doing your boards be off you turn you package in? I wasn't aware you could do that without an official SAT score which I've been waiting on since March 22nd, ordered it online ebut the rush service is down so it takes 2 to 4 weeks so I'm still waiting

 

[exNavyOffRec]

Oceanography hopeful here. Doing my SAT tomorrow and internal officers board this week. Seems like overall interest in the STA program is dwindling in the last several years. Wonder if commands are promoting it like they used to or if overall interest is not there.

I've been waiting 6 years to apply. Because of schooling and command limitations on endorsing any officer programs, I haven't had a shot since 2009. Looking forward to finally getting a look.

How's your package coming along?

Interest may appear to be down because of the few spots each year, and most go to nuke options, have you looked at previous years selections? there are many that have had zero selects each year, that gets people a little depressed.