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FY18 STA-21 Applicants

abigail vytlas

OCS SNFO/AMDO
Results are out now for FY17. Those not accepted lets help each other out and figure out whats the best way to improve our odds of getting selected next year. Those that were selected, if you would like to email out PDFs of your package, I believe everyone would greatly appreciate it.

This will be my third year to submit, I'm planning to retake my SAT in December and my ASTB in February. I'll graduate with my associates in December, hoping to knock out Pre-calc & physics. Anyone know of a good school to take those with online or in San Diego?
 

HDND

Dare Mighty Things
Results are out now for FY17. Those not accepted lets help each other out and figure out whats the best way to improve our odds of getting selected next year. Those that were selected, if you would like to email out PDFs of your package, I believe everyone would greatly appreciate it.

This will be my third year to submit, I'm planning to retake my SAT in December and my ASTB in February. I'll graduate with my associates in December, hoping to knock out Pre-calc & physics. Anyone know of a good school to take those with online or in San Diego?

Hey keep your head up and keep moving forward. It took me 3 times to be selected as well. I will create a drop box of my package in the near future and put it out for everyone to use. Biggest thing that I did was ensure I was in a leadership position at work and was taking as many college course as I could. Good luck next year and let me know if you have any questions.
 

DANG3R M0US3

Active Member
Results are out now for FY17. Those not accepted lets help each other out and figure out whats the best way to improve our odds of getting selected next year. Those that were selected, if you would like to email out PDFs of your package, I believe everyone would greatly appreciate it.

This will be my third year to submit, I'm planning to retake my SAT in December and my ASTB in February. I'll graduate with my associates in December, hoping to knock out Pre-calc & physics. Anyone know of a good school to take those with online or in San Diego?

I found that Arizona State is great. The cost per credit hour is a lot, but they have a scholarship that covers the tuition as long as you use TA. I am confident that taking difficult college courses and doing well in them is what put me over the top for selection this time. Don't ever give up! If this is your goal, improve your package every year. This was my fourth submission and I put everything I could into making me a better candidate every single year.
 

abigail vytlas

OCS SNFO/AMDO
Thank you for the info! Do you happen to know the scholarship name? I just contacted them today, but just in case they don't bring it up. Looks like if I go with ASU I'll also be going towards an electrical engineering degree. I really want civil but the only online college with that doesn't offer precalc or physics.
 

DANG3R M0US3

Active Member
Thank you for the info! Do you happen to know the scholarship name? I just contacted them today, but just in case they don't bring it up. Looks like if I go with ASU I'll also be going towards an electrical engineering degree. I really want civil but the only online college with that doesn't offer precalc or physics.

The scholarship is the ASU Military Active Duty and Reservist Scholarship and the information can be found here: https://asuonline.asu.edu/military-scholarship.

Their Electrical Engineering program is great! I have completed 70 credits with ASU and though it has been challenging, I have learned a great deal. The key for the online engineering programs, especially if you are planning on doing STA-21 is to make sure they are ABET accredited. Most of the NROTC schools have ABET accredited programs, so you want to make sure that a lot of your credits will transfer. This website has a full list of ABET accredited online programs just to give you a few more options: http://www.abet.org/accreditation/new-to-accreditation/online-programs/#what

If you have any more questions about ASU, please let me know.
 

Wamaa

New Member
Hello Everyone,

First time applying for this program, trying go for pilot. I'm still putting my application together and I'm planning on retaking ASTB in the near future as I just took that test the other day probably will retake the SAT to. I'm still new in the Navy, one year mark was in June.
Anyways whether I get picked first time or not, finishing the whole process will be a great accomplishment.
Hope we are going to help each other on this journey to success. **Cheers**
 

cbk412

New Member
Does anyone know of what common attributes have made strong applicants in the past. I'm new to the Navy, but I have a strong background in mathematics (3 semesters of calculus, diff eq, engineering math, linear algebra) and science (2 semesters of general chem, 2 semesters of organic chemistry and 2 semesters of calculus physics) and 1580 SAT. Just took my first real PRT after bootcamp and got high excellent and low outstanding. Working on my ESWS boards as of now but will most likely finish out after christmas stand down.

For whatever its worth my ASVAB was 99 and I made 3rd class first time up with 99th percentile among the test takers. I am putting everything I have into earning a commission and being a good sailor, but could use some direction in order to make myself the strongest candidate possible.
 

Kevin Mosley

New Member
Hello everyone,
I am a SN and do not know the first thing about putting in a package. What is the first through last thing that I should do? Really need help. Here is my personal statement any feedback would be great:

PERSONAL STATEMENT

My passion for serving my country came at a very young age when I would visit my great uncle and listen to his Marine war stories from his time in Vietnam. As I grew older I did not know what career I wanted to pursue but I always knew I wanted to be a leader.

As an all-district, all-conference football player and team captain, during high school, I lacked maturity and did not focus on my classes, as reflected by my transcripts. Since then, I have matured and gained a new perspective of what is required of me and what I personally expect for myself. Within the year I have been in the navy, I have completed 30 of the 60 credits required for an Associate in Accounting at American Military University with a 4.0 GPA while being a fulltime sailor and volunteering.

The Seaman to Admiral Program is the next step on my journey towards becoming a Naval Surface Warfare Officer. Continually setting ambitious goals and high standards for myself is a cornerstone of my personality. This program affords me the opportunity to fulfill my dream of becoming a Naval Officer and reach my greatest potential in the Navy. It allows me to complete my Bachelor’s degree and build the foundation needed to one day become the next great Chief of Naval Operations!

My time as a Master-at-Arms has made me an exceptional candidate for Surface Warfare community due to the core values and arduous training requirements I have undergone, allowing me the ability to take charge in any situation. It is a privilege to work as a Master-at-Arms, knowing that safety and security of the installation is in my hands. It also has enabled me to live my life according to the oath “that I will wear my shield of authority with dignity and restraint, and promote by example high standards of conduct, appearance, courtesy and performance”. This responsibility is not one that I take lightly and will hold myself to an even higher standard as a Naval Officer.

Throughout my short career I have grown as a person and as a leader. Staying calm and commanding the scene during a life threatening car accident was critical while I assessed the situation, provided bystander crowd control and coordinated with emergency medical personnel to determine appropriate medical treatment. I continue to hone these skills everyday as I lead fellow junior and senior Sailors while conducting tuition assistance and qualification training.

Within my first year on board I was fully qualified in my job, allowing me to start school early. As the only seaman Duty Armorer at my command, I am responsible for the issue, inventory and maintenance of 428 weapons, 76,115 rounds of ammunition, 26 AA&E keys, and various police equipment totaling over tens of thousands of dollars. I am also responsible for the qualifying of 3 Second-Class Petty Officers and 3 Third-Class Petty Officer Duty Armorers.

As a Surface Warfare officer, I will continue to make sound decisions that affect the safety, success, and well-being of all the Sailors within my command. I am devoted to my Navy and will continue to uphold the core values of Honor, Courage, and Commitment. I want to lead the Navy in a new direction; manned or unmanned. Leading change will be difficult and require energetic and motivated officers who can adapt to new environments quickly. I know that I have what it takes, because great leaders are created, not born. Being selected for a commissioning program will afford me the opportunity to enhance my leadership skills and stand alongside my fellow officers, prepared to lead outstanding men and women in tomorrow’s Navy. Thus, my pursuit of a commission is not a request to be an Officer, but rather an obligation to lead those around me as we reach for greatness.





K.J. Mosley


RATE/RANK: MASN
APPLYING FOR: Core/SWO
EVALS: MP (only eval)
SMART: 15 SH
COLLEGE: American Military University AA in Accounting 30/60credits
HIGH SCHOOL: waiting to come in mail but know I did not have good grades
LEADERSHIP: conducts command tuition assistance training and trains prospective Duty Armorers as SN(only SN with qual)
AWARDS: 0
TIS:
1yr
SAT: scheduled to take on jan.25
WARFARE QUALS:
n/a
PRT: Good, Good, good
LORs: n/a
MISC:
 

HDND

Dare Mighty Things
Hello everyone,
I am a SN and do not know the first thing about putting in a package. What is the first through last thing that I should do? Really need help. Here is my personal statement any feedback would be great:

PERSONAL STATEMENT

My passion for serving my country came at a very young age when I would visit my great uncle and listen to his Marine war stories from his time in Vietnam. As I grew older I did not know what career I wanted to pursue but I always knew I wanted to be a leader.

As an all-district, all-conference football player and team captain, during high school, I lacked maturity and did not focus on my classes, as reflected by my transcripts. Since then, I have matured and gained a new perspective of what is required of me and what I personally expect for myself. Within the year I have been in the navy, I have completed 30 of the 60 credits required for an Associate in Accounting at American Military University with a 4.0 GPA while being a fulltime sailor and volunteering.

The Seaman to Admiral Program is the next step on my journey towards becoming a Naval Surface Warfare Officer. Continually setting ambitious goals and high standards for myself is a cornerstone of my personality. This program affords me the opportunity to fulfill my dream of becoming a Naval Officer and reach my greatest potential in the Navy. It allows me to complete my Bachelor’s degree and build the foundation needed to one day become the next great Chief of Naval Operations!

My time as a Master-at-Arms has made me an exceptional candidate for Surface Warfare community due to the core values and arduous training requirements I have undergone, allowing me the ability to take charge in any situation. It is a privilege to work as a Master-at-Arms, knowing that safety and security of the installation is in my hands. It also has enabled me to live my life according to the oath “that I will wear my shield of authority with dignity and restraint, and promote by example high standards of conduct, appearance, courtesy and performance”. This responsibility is not one that I take lightly and will hold myself to an even higher standard as a Naval Officer.

Throughout my short career I have grown as a person and as a leader. Staying calm and commanding the scene during a life threatening car accident was critical while I assessed the situation, provided bystander crowd control and coordinated with emergency medical personnel to determine appropriate medical treatment. I continue to hone these skills everyday as I lead fellow junior and senior Sailors while conducting tuition assistance and qualification training.

Within my first year on board I was fully qualified in my job, allowing me to start school early. As the only seaman Duty Armorer at my command, I am responsible for the issue, inventory and maintenance of 428 weapons, 76,115 rounds of ammunition, 26 AA&E keys, and various police equipment totaling over tens of thousands of dollars. I am also responsible for the qualifying of 3 Second-Class Petty Officers and 3 Third-Class Petty Officer Duty Armorers.

As a Surface Warfare officer, I will continue to make sound decisions that affect the safety, success, and well-being of all the Sailors within my command. I am devoted to my Navy and will continue to uphold the core values of Honor, Courage, and Commitment. I want to lead the Navy in a new direction; manned or unmanned. Leading change will be difficult and require energetic and motivated officers who can adapt to new environments quickly. I know that I have what it takes, because great leaders are created, not born. Being selected for a commissioning program will afford me the opportunity to enhance my leadership skills and stand alongside my fellow officers, prepared to lead outstanding men and women in tomorrow’s Navy. Thus, my pursuit of a commission is not a request to be an Officer, but rather an obligation to lead those around me as we reach for greatness.





K.J. Mosley


RATE/RANK: MASN
APPLYING FOR: Core/SWO
EVALS: MP (only eval)
SMART: 15 SH
COLLEGE: American Military University AA in Accounting 30/60credits
HIGH SCHOOL: waiting to come in mail but know I did not have good grades
LEADERSHIP: conducts command tuition assistance training and trains prospective Duty Armorers as SN(only SN with qual)
AWARDS: 0
TIS:
1yr
SAT: scheduled to take on jan.25
WARFARE QUALS:
n/a
PRT: Good, Good, good
LORs: n/a
MISC:
SN Mosley,

I understand that you are new to the Navy and are still learning all of the in's and out's. I uploaded my package so that you and everyone else will have something to use as a guide to help you on your journey while applying for commissioning programs. I want to first recommend reading OPNAVINST 1420.1B front to back and understand all of its content. I do want to however touch on your previous post. I am angered that you would post a "personal statement" that is not your and claim it as your own. Yes applying for these programs is hard and sometimes it can be confusing and no one has the right answer. That is the point, it is suppose to be difficult and require meticulous research and scrutiny while putting together your package. In addition it teach you to network with other who have found success in these programs so that you can learn from their mistakes and successes. That is why I uploaded my package for everyone to use as they go through this process. I have spent the better part of three years writing and re-writing my personal statement. It is to be uses as a guide and not something for you to plagiarize. This is my intellectual property and I am appalled that you put your name on it and post it to the very forum that you stole it from. Being in the Navy whether enlisted or officer means that you need to have integrity. I am not going to sit here and tell you what integrity means but I would seriously rethink your "personal statement" and why you want to be a Naval Officer. I am not saying that you should not apply or that I will not help you in the future but I think you seriously shot yourself in the foot with your carless action as you stole my and possibly others works and claimed it as your own.

Think long and hard about what you did and what our core values are!
Honor, Courage, and Commitment.
Get your shit together shipmate!
 

Kevin Mosley

New Member
SN Mosley,

I understand that you are new to the Navy and are still learning all of the in's and out's. I uploaded my package so that you and everyone else will have something to use as a guide to help you on your journey while applying for commissioning programs. I want to first recommend reading OPNAVINST 1420.1B front to back and understand all of its content. I do want to however touch on your previous post. I am angered that you would post a "personal statement" that is not your and claim it as your own. Yes applying for these programs is hard and sometimes it can be confusing and no one has the right answer. That is the point, it is suppose to be difficult and require meticulous research and scrutiny while putting together your package. In addition it teach you to network with other who have found success in these programs so that you can learn from their mistakes and successes. That is why I uploaded my package for everyone to use as they go through this process. I have spent the better part of three years writing and re-writing my personal statement. It is to be uses as a guide and not something for you to plagiarize. This is my intellectual property and I am appalled that you put your name on it and post it to the very forum that you stole it from. Being in the Navy whether enlisted or officer means that you need to have integrity. I am not going to sit here and tell you what integrity means but I would seriously rethink your "personal statement" and why you want to be a Naval Officer. I am not saying that you should not apply or that I will not help you in the future but I think you seriously shot yourself in the foot with your carless action as you stole my and possibly others works and claimed it as your own.

Think long and hard about what you did and what our core values are!
Honor, Courage, and Commitment.
Get your shit together shipmate!
I appreciate your honesty but to be truthful I read through your package only AFTER my statement was done. Granted it is EXTREMELY similar but I did not plagiarize to my best knowledge. I was given a template from my command and I shaped it to fit my own information. You have my sincere apologies but I DO NOT like being called out on something I had no idea about. I will be happy to remove any reference to your statement but I must say that there is a template out there that is EXTREMELY similar to yours.

Very Respectfully,
Kevin Mosley
 
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Kevin Mosley

New Member
Hello everyone,

I would like to personally apologize to @HDND and the rest of the air warriors community. I did plagiarize his personal statement for reasons that are unlike a potential officer candidate. I have spoken with him and now I am coming clean to the community to let you guys know that I am not out here to steal your stuff but I am really really really seeking help from anyone. I am very passionate about this progran and started off on a terrible foot and for those that are thinking of plagiarizing someone's work and lie about it is not worth it at all !! Again @HDND I apologize sincerely and I am putting this up as a warning to those considering doing the same and lesson learned as a SN I have a lot more buttchewing to come.
 

ML_METOC

FY17 OCEANO Alternate
Yikes...this thread escalated quickly.

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