I would appreciate it if someone could look over my statement and give me their 2 cents. I will be submitting my package in the next few months for SWO and Supply. If anyone could make some recommendations on how to make this statement stronger I will gladly appreciate it. I have 3 NJP in my record (2002,2009,2010) and one of them is a DUI.
A commission as a Naval Officer will provide me a sense of accomplishment and pride, allowing me to continue supporting the Navy’s mission with increased leadership opportunities in challenging environments. I have made a few mistakes; I accepted and learned from them. I can sincerely say I am now a better man. I pride myself being disciplined, overcoming all odds and obstacles to achieve my potential. My experiences in life, strong desire to succeed, leadership ability, unquestionable work ethic and will to do what is right for my country make me an excellent candidate for the OCS program.
My missions as an officer will be to surpass expectations set forth by my command, qualify and become a subject matter expert in my field, and to never become complacent. There are always new challenges and goals to be achieved. My personal goals have been to further my education, continue community involvement, and when not deployed dedicate as much time as possible to my family.
An officer must deliver under pressure with poise and grace. As a young undesignated Sailor I conducted accurate and complete inventory of over 2,000 line items of hazmat material. As an Operations Specialist I made critical recommendations to senior officers during time of war. At the Naval War College I had the privilege of leading high visibility events, including Joint Maritime Operations. I am confident that my diverse background, deck plate experience, leadership, and achievements, I have what it takes to be that leader and I kindly request your acceptance into the OCS program. If selected I can assure you I will succeed.